Thursday, March 7, 2013

Five Sentence Fiction : Whisper

It has been awhile since I participated in Lillie McFerrin's Five Sentence Fiction.   I feel a little bit rusty in regards to my flash skills-- so I thought I'd see what I come up with.  FSF is a fun/awesome exercise that always delivers a wide variety of entertaining entries- check them out and know that I highly suggest joining us!

Lillie McFerrin

What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
This week:WHISPER


Extending my arms above my head, I slowly begin to bend at the waist, first to my left and then to my right.  My hands, magnetic to the atmosphere around me, extend into the air.  Breathing in, I become aware of the way my lungs whisper inside of my body, a slow, melodic pulse against the beating of my heart.  I focus on the rhythm, allowing it to become the beat of my footsteps.  I walk to the center of the room, removing my robe, allowing them to see me naked for the first time. 


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    1. Ha! Yes! I'm reading a story and the MC is a model for an art class... I think it stuck with me :)

  2. Beautifully described! I could feel a little apprehension as she breathed in and out...

    1. really!? that's great! thank you!

  3. This is really lovely, Azia.

  4. Beautiful, it conveys a sense of artistry along with a bit of apprehension. I think it must at first be quite strange to be an art studio model, having no opportunity for interaction with those for who you are on view. This is written very well!

  5. Interesting piece! To listen to one's own self in essential, especially when having to do something taking focus and courage.

  6. Beautiful writing. I could sense the breathing of the model. Well done

  7. Beautiful piece of writing and gorgeous use of whisper. x

  8. very peaceful and calming portrayal :)


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