Thursday, March 14, 2013

Five Sentence Fiction : Paradise

 It's that time of the week for Lillie McFerrin's Five Sentence Fiction!
Lillie McFerrin

What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
This week: PARADISE

The sound of murmuring voices flooded his ears but he no longer had eyes that allowed him to look in their direction.  There wasn't much of anything to see-- just darkness and the sound of his own thoughts, an echo against the black walls surrounding him.  It was just a dream he thought to himself, a euphoric paradise encasing his mind as pictures of beautiful moments snapped passed him-- children running up and hugging his legs, wiping the sweat from his brow after a long day of work, the sun setting against the backdrop of the farm- a burnt orange that made the sky look as if it was on fire, the glint in his wife's eyes on their wedding day.  Suddenly, he felt trapped, my wife, my wife!  Thrusting back and forth in his mind, a scream no one else could hear filled his head, Gloria!


  1. Sad but well done.

  2. Anonymous3/15/2013

    What a horrifying situation. Well written.

  3. Anonymous3/15/2013

    Very interesting to see what is Paradise to different people. Nice work.

  4. An unusual story but an interesting one.


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