Dialogue- Eavesdropping

For the past couple of months I have been focusing on writing natural sounding dialogue.  I have a tendency to get held up on the flow of conversation and whether or not the rhythm of speech is 1- believable and 2- true to the character.  It's a pain in the ass to get hung up on details like this when you are unleashing the beast that is a story from your soul/brain/heart/innards.

Also, annoyingly so, when I'm reading other people's work and their dialogue is unnatural, I can't get around it and I inevitably get turned off from the story.  Usually, I don't even finish it. (I know- asshole move!)

A professor of mine posted this video on dialogue that I wanted to share with you!  (Since, I've noticed that many of my followers are also aspiring writers!)

I love this video for many reasons.  My professor is insanely awesome (I'm taking a screenwriting workshop with him next fall and I'm excited/ridiculously nervous), this video relays some valuable knowledge yet is also entertaining, and he mentions eaves dropping on people's conversations and jotting them down (which I do A LOT!)  Here's the video:



And, here are a few snippets from my notebook of conversations I've jotted down recently:

Boy 1- "Call me when you can.  Yeah?"

Boy 2- "Ben."

Boy 1- "Ben."

Boy 2- "B E N."

Boy 1- "Okay."

??  Yeah, I don't get it either.

Boy- "You like what?  Oh my god."

Girl- "What?"

Boy-"But.."

Girl- "I don't get."

???  I "don't get" either.

Girl 1- "So um that's so scary 'cuz like, anyways."

Girl 2- "Um, they said something about.. ummm.."

Girl 1- "Yeah!"

Girl 1- "That's it!"

I'm glad they so enthusiastically discovered whatever the hell it is they were trying to figure out.

Boy 1- "Monte."

Boy 2- "How's it going?"

Boy 1- "Good."

Boy 3- "You be havin'?"

Boy 2- "No."

Boy 1- "That's a good thing."

Also- NO CLUE.  And no, "be havin'" was not pronounced behaving...  I think they just had really bad grammar, sadly.  :(

I wonder if I've ever been the subject of someones eavesdropping?  And, in that case- I can only imagine what they've overheard!  I can be very awkward when it comes to verbal conversation, if I'm excited or upset, I usually make no sense whatsoever.

I also spend a lot of time making "general" observations about a space.  For example:

6 Black Sweaters/Shirts

4 Gray 

1 Lime Green

1 Forest Green

1 Pink

1 Tan (me)

-

13 No Scarves

1 Scarf (me)

-

4 Glasses (1 is me)

9 Without Glasses

I think it's odd that I didn't specify how many people were male or female.  I must have initially been intrigued by the number of people wearing black.  Especially because I wear a lot of black myself, but apparently was wearing tan that day.

Do any of you ever write down dialogue?  Or observe spaces?  Or anything else kind of odd?

Cantaloupe Boobs : A Poem

A couple of days ago, one of my favorite bloggers- Mrs. One Day did something *really* neat on her blog.  She read an entry out loud and posted the link so you could listen!   I really enjoyed it and, decided to follow in her lead!  (You should also hop on over to her page and start following her blog!)

I have decided to share with you a rather silly poem I wrote a couple weeks ago.

I hope you enjoy!

Cantaloupe Boobs

Written by Azia Archer

Boobs are just big balls of fat that allow you to take 8 pounds off of your actual weight because
really each one weighs four pounds right
when they are the size of canaloupes and all your friends get to wear the cute clothes and you’re stuck
with cantaloupes for breasts
the men gawking at you like you’re naked and touching yourself
exposing so much skin it should be a crime but really you are just trying to wear a fucking tank top
because it’s so hot outside and you are sick of sweating– of the sweat dripping
between your boobs a slip and slide for ants
and your bra is sticking to you and it makes you want to scream and and laugh and take a shower.

Review : The Hunger Games (spoilers!)

I've been talking about this movie for months, and this past weekend it finally hit the theaters.  It's always a feeling of mixed emotions when a story you love is adapted from the pages and brought to the big screen.  You are excited to see the world you care so much about visualized, but- afraid that it won't do the story justice.  (Have you seen the movie adaptation of The Handmaid's Tale by Margaret Atwood?  Oh you haven't?  That's because it's fucking terrible!)

The Hunger Games delivered.  I was very pleased, and saw the movie twice.  I had been following IMDB pretty religiously, as well as (over)analyzing every trailer in order to be fully prepared for any changes in the movie.  (After 8 Harry Potter movies, I'm used to things being changed!)  I also didn't want to be sitting there annoyed the entire time with thoughts of how things were happening differently, etc.

And, trust me when I say that The Hunger Games movie is FULL of different material. The original screenplay was drafted by Suzanne Collins (the author), it was later re-written by screenwriter Billy Ray and Gary Ross (the director) and, the final draft, used in the film, came from Suzanne Collins and Gary Ross.  (Quite the process!)  But, I love how hands on Suzanne Collins was during this project- drafting the script, advising on casting, etc.  It gave me a sense of confidence for the movie.  I mean, it's HER WORLD.  She created it, and I trust her to know what's best for her characters!

The novel is written in a first person narrative.  Katniss unveils the world of Panem, the districts, the capitol and, the games to the audience.  I can only imagine how difficult it would be to take a first person narrative and make it an all encompassing story.  But, they pulled it off!  There are additional scenes with President Snow, head game-maker Seneca Crane, the actual control room for the games, and some interesting insight into District 11 after the death of Rue, just to name a few.
Jennifer Lawrence is unbelievable.  Her portrayal of Katniss is authentic, natural, strong, she carries the movie (as she should!)  I have to emphasize how much she embodied this character- she was PHENOMENAL.  I cannot wait to see her performances in Catching Fire and Mockingjay!

In general- the casting was pretty amazing.  Elizabeth Banks as Effie Trinket, Woody Harleson as Haymitch Abernathy, Donald Sutherland as President Snow, Stanley Tucci as Caesar Flickerman, I could go on and on and on.  And yes, Josh Hutcherson delivers a very endearing and likable Peeta!  Liam Hemsworth also delivers a strong Gale... and I think he will really be able to pull off the next movies and the direction Gales character goes in.

Visually, the film is stunning.  The seam, the reaping in town, the capitol, the games- the sets are dead on.  Completely do the story justice.

The Reaping

The Seam!

The scenes that were not originally in the novel, but were in the movie added great perspective.   You see the gamemakers as the game unfolds which I thought was really, really cool.  You see it as the television show as opposed to just being with Katniss the entire time.
The film is over 2 hours long.  Despite this fact, the film still feels so rushed.  It makes you realize how much information is in the novel.  (And, why HBO mini-series *cough* Game of Thrones *cough* really deliver a much more enjoyable adaptation for die-hards.)

There is a certain depth missing in this film.  In the 140 minute run-time, the emotional attachment to the characters, the relationship building between Katniss and Peeta- it's not portrayed accurately.  It's very surface and does not do it justice.  The impact of their experience together in the games is not felt by the audience.  How can you realize what these two experienced trying to survive, if their dynamic isn't given proper explanation?

They were told to appear united- she was not supposed to push his hand away!

So, they kissed?  Does she like him?  How do the audience know?

I'm not going to go into the Madge-Mockingjay Pin-thing because I already talked about it before the movie came out, and I already went through the motions of being disappointed and sad about it.  (Ha!)  I do understand that adding that in would've been an additional 25 minutes into the film...  But, gah!  The history!  And how this storyline brings together Haymitch, Katniss's mother, rebelion in the next stories!
But, that brings me back to my main point- this film was JAM PACKED and there was no way to fit everything in.

President Snow you scary SOB

If I had to pick out the singular thing that made me go "NOOO!!!"  It has to be the fact, that at the end, when Katniss and Peeta are fighting with the mutts and Cato at the cornucopia- Peeta's leg is mauled.  Which results in him having a peg leg and using a cane in the later series.  Why was that so hard to incorporate?  Dammit!
Ugh.

Now that I'm over that- I give Hunger Games a 9/10- I can't wait for it to come out on DVD so I can watch it repeatedly, whenever I'd like a Hunger Games experience in less time than it takes to read the novel.  I am insanely excited for the next installment and I can't wait to see who they cast for the next movie!  (Plutarch, Mags, Finnick, Brutus, Annie, etc etc!)

So- read the books.  Check out the film.  You'll be happy about it!

Slow Dance

Want to listen to a fucking awesome poem?  Let's go then!

"This is like, so stupid..."

So, today in Shakespeare (I'm taking a small, 2 credit course focusing on a few of his tragedies)- I had a moment that resembled this:

Source: Uploaded by user via Azia on Pinterest

We were watching a production (BBC - 1974?? I want to say) of Scene 5- the famous "death" scene in the play and a girl who sits behind me (and mind you, is constantly texting and checking her Facebook) murmurs, "This is like, so stupid.  It's like, so unrealistic."

THANK YOU FOR ENLIGHTENING ME TO THE SINGLE-HANDEDLY MOST INTELLIGENT CRITIQUE I HAVE EVER HEARD.  My view of Shakespeare is forever changed.  

Yes, I was just using the sarcasm font.

This play was published, I want to say in- 1597?  That is over 400 years ago, and we are still studying it!  This is one of the most poetic plays that I have ever read.  There are so many themes to be discovered, and so much metaphor, ahh!  It's an incredible work of literature, of art.  It is simultaneously tragic and beautiful.  And, to sit in a college level classroom, with other English majors and hear some ignorant girl mutter something so mundane and generic just got UNDER.MY.SKIN.

I turned around and asked her if she'd rather watch the love story unfold in "How to Lose a Guy in 10 Days."*  She returned my question with pursed lips and her eyebrows raised.  Don't worry, I gave her the "bitch-please-you-don't-phase-me" look right back.  Because, let's be honest- no one phases me.

Why go to college and study literature if you do not appreciate it?  You don't have to like this play... As another girl, Dana, later pointed out during discussion, she doesn't believe Romeo, despite being a protagonist has any true redeeming qualities- and further, she explained WHY.  This is a true critique, this is the type of thing I expect to hear and discuss in a college level Shakespeare course.

Obviously, this play is like, not like, realistic.  It's a play, and it's a play that was written over 400 years ago!  I swear, college campuses are becoming a mecca for the unintelligent- all these kids care about is partying and looking "cool."  Rarely, in any of my classes is there debate.  Everyone just wants the answers to the test.  It's disheartening.

But, Romeo and Juliet- it is breathtaking!  A classic!  C'mon guys!  Here is Act 3- Scene 1 in the 1968 Zeffereli version:

I couldn't find the entire scene in this version that shows Romeo killing Tybalt.. But, you get the picture.

Looking at the modernized, 1996 version of the same scene... Yes, it's definitely one of the loosest interpretations of the play, but it's still amazing!  And brilliant!

Moral of the story- Romeo and Juliet is awesome and, if you are going to take college level coursework.. be serious about it or PLEASE quit wasting every one's time and stay inside watching Jersey Shore re-runs.  JEEZ.  Snookie wants squish squish.  And, Azia want's you to shut your freaking mouth!

*author's note: I thoroughly enjoy romantic comedies, and find pleasure in the above mentioned movie. please take no offense!